It'd be wise for you to do some formatting before we take a look. As
@b789 notes, there are a complete lack of paragraphs, which makes it appear as a wall of text, and therefore hard to read. You should try to make it as readable as possible for the assessor.
I also notice reference to a few URLs - where you do this, you should ensure that any content you want to draw attention to from that website is included in your appeal - you should work on the assumption that the assessor will not click any links.