I was planning to simply copy the Britannia appeal found here:
https://www.ftla.uk/private-parking-tickets/britannia-parking-ntk-for-not-entering-car-reg-in-pub-the-fleece-carpark-penwort/msg103607/#msg103607(but minus the final paragraph about them having no hope at POPLA).
Will that do the job?
Copied and pasted from the above thread for convenience:
"I am the keeper of the vehicle and I dispute your 'parking charge'. I deny any liability or contractual agreement and I will be making a complaint about your predatory conduct to your client landowner.
As your Notice to Keeper (NtK) does not fully comply with ALL the requirements of PoFA 2012, you are unable to hold the keeper of the vehicle liable for the charge. Partial or even substantial compliance is not sufficient. There will be no admission as to who was driving and no inference or assumptions can be drawn. Britannia has relied on contract law allegations of breach against the driver only.
The registered keeper cannot be presumed or inferred to have been the driver, nor pursued under some twisted interpretation of the law of agency. Your NtK can only hold the driver liable.
I would also add that you have breached your own code of practice, the PPSCoP, in that Under Annex F - Apeals charter, (F.3.g) it stipulates that under the circumstances you cite for raising the 'parking charge', you MUST discount the charge to £20. You did not do that.
Britannia have no hope at POPLA, so you are urged to save us both a complete waste of time and cancel the PCN."