No 'Notice to Driver' was served whilst the car was stationary.
One isn't required. All of the spiel about Notices to Driver serves as an unnecessary distraction from your more salient points. You could cut this out to focus on the main point. For example:
1. Lack of Keeper Liability I am appealing this charge in my capacity as the Registered Keeper of the vehicle. The driver of the vehicle has not been identified. MET Parking are unable to recover the charge from me as the Registered Keeper as they have chosen not to make use of the provisions of Schedule 4 of the Protection of Freedoms Act (PoFA). Although the notice purports to be a 'Notice to Keeper', it has not been given in accordance with paragraph 9 of PoFA. Paragraph 9(4) of PoFA states:(4)The notice must be given by—
(a)handing it to the keeper, or leaving it at a current address for service for the keeper, within the relevant period; or
(b)sending it by post to a current address for service for the keeper so that it is delivered to that address within the relevant period.
The 'relevant period' is defined by paragraph 9(5) as "the period of 14 days beginning with the day after that on which the specified period of parking ended". Paragraph 9(6) states:A notice sent by post is to be presumed, unless the contrary is proved, to have been delivered (and so “given” for the purposes of sub-paragraph (4)) on the second working day after the day on which it is posted; and for this purpose “working day” means any day other than a Saturday, Sunday or a public holiday in England and Wales.
Date of parking period: 30 September 2023
Date of issue/posting of notice: 17 October 2023
Date the notice is delivered/"given": 19 October 2023
Elapsed period between event and giving of notice: 19 daysIt is therefore clear that the notice was not given within the relevant period of 14 days, as required by 9(4) of PoFA. As a result, MET Parking are unable to recover the charge from me, the Registered Keeper, and the charge should therefore be cancelled.
Then carry on with your other points.
On those...
The BPA Code of Practice point 20.5a stipulates that: "When issuing a parking charge notice you may use photographs as evidence that a vehicle was parked in an unauthorised way.
Make sure you're using the most recent Code of Practice - 20.5a doesn't exist, it's 21.5a in the latest CoP. I'm not sure this is the strongest point in the world anyway (although the timestamp isn't particularly legible), but no real harm in including it.
3) No landowner Authority:
Again, make sure you're using up-to-date information here. You describe a ruling from 2017 as 'recent', which might be a bit of a stretch, it was 6 years ago. There's some suggested wording on the MSE forum here you can use if you want to make this point: https://forums.moneysavingexpert.com/discussion/comment/71287628/#Comment_71287628 (https://forums.moneysavingexpert.com/discussion/comment/71287628/#Comment_71287628)